This essay that i finished is all summary about the two arti

This essay that i finished is all summary about the two articles. Needs help to revise it and use your own idea.please directly answer the prompt question by making the answer as each topic sentences and develop them into your own ideas? Please try to use ‘Individuals, ‘People’instead of ‘I’, ‘we’, ‘our’ when state the ideaTry to avoid summary in the essay and bring up more own idea in connecting the two articles please.